I'll... try... don't know if I can match your genius, though.

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Is it just me or is HIS right hand on his hip in the middle of his body?

And the skin tone switches for his left arm.

Nice catch. It was a mistake that I realized I made long into the process. I couldn't bring myself to go back and fix it.


That's due to a filter layer I added on top to add to the lighting. I may adjust it, dunno.

shading implies he has breasts

arms are also much bigger than his neck
If he was lifting enough to get those arms his neck shouldn't be a pencil

Haha, yeah. That was intentional. The thing is with this project, is that I plan on doing quite a few more, of friends irl. When I wear that shirt, it's a joke between my close friends (not sure how it came about) that it looks like I have small breasts. So, the shirt is known as the "boob top", lol. I wanted to reflect that in the artwork.

EDIT: @your edit

Hm, didn't think about that. Thanks Whimzer.

Could you upload it in separate frames? It's a little too fast to critique.

You aren't supposed to critique animation for it's individual frames in this type of scenario, lol.

At least slowing it down would be nice... but oh well...

From what I can see when she moves her left arm back it jumps back quite far, almost as if she's dodging something. The hair isn't very natural in a sense that her bangs stay p. much flat compared to the movement in her pigtails. Her a**/pants jolt up in one frame causing it to look very awkward and jolty. A little too many frames where she has her left arm out front, possibly fixable by removing/adjusting the frame with the weird a** movement (literally). Left sleeve grows dramatically at one point.

Not worried about the conclusion of what I've said so don't worry about confirming or reasoning with my points, just take what you can from it.

Thanks, that helps a lot. I'll keep it all in mind when the next one comes around.

Face and the left forearm are painful to look at =/
you could move the left hand up/right a bit then just redraw the outside line for the forearm
the face is simply too short perhaps you could extend it upwards and space out the facial features a bit