Raiku
Joined: Sun Sep 21, 2008 5:01 pm Posts: 232 Location: Umm... I AM INNOCENT I TELL YOU!!! INNOCENT!!!
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Name: Raiku
Race: Half-Demon Half-Angel
Age: Immortal, Appears 29
Time Periods: All
Alignment: Good-Neutral
Weapons:
Rapture: A long, powerful, black Gunblade. It is so powerful that it can shoot dark meteors and black rain.
Appearance: Raiku has long silver hair with a little blue in it and wears a long black and silver coat with green shadings.
Personality: Raiku has a serious but caring personality.
Family:
Father: Gabriel, The Arch-Angel
Mother: Unknown Demon (Deceased)
Bio: Raiku lived in hell, but he got tired of the killing and became a Demon hunter, a person who captures demons. These are all of the demons Raiku has caught in the past: Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride. He has two life-long best friends named Raggon & Raggonix.
Abilities: Precognition, Clairvoyance, Tracking, Invincibilty, Phasing, Telepathy, Ice, Levitation, Flight, Demon Powers. ------------------------------------------------------------- Name: Raggon
Race: Fire-Master
Age: 33
Time Period: 2008
Alignment: Good
Weapons: Colt Viper Machine Gun.
Appearance: Raggon has medium brown hair and huge muscles. He wears a sleeveless T-Shirt.
Personality: He has a joking but well-meaning personality.
Family:
Father: Unknown (Deceased)
Mother: Unknown (Deceased)
Younger Brother: Raggonix
Bio: He has a younger brother named Raggonix. Their parents died in a fire when Raggon's fire powers first manifested. He and Raggonix are life-long friends with Raiku. He has the power of Fire Manipulation. ------------------------------------------------------------- Name: Raggonix
Race: Lightning-Master
Age: 26
Time Period: 2008
Alignment: Good
Weapons: Laptop, Bombs, Machines.
Appearance: Raggonix has medium black hair and glasses. He wears a buttoned-up collar shirt.
Personality: He has a friendly and calculating personality. He is a genius and a master hacker.
Family:
Father: Unknown (Deceased)
Mother: Unknown (Deceased)
Older Brother: Raggon
Bio: He has a older brother named Raggon. Their parents died in a fire when Raggon's fire powers first manifested. He and Raggon are life-long friends with Raiku. He has the power of Lightning Manipulation.
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Last edited by Raiku on Tue Sep 30, 2008 5:20 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Kerim
Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 8:49 am Posts: 762 Country:
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They're all pretty short.
Try going into more depth on their appearance, personality, and bio. Describe what the coat is like on Raiku for example.
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Copy'n'Paste
Joined: Tue Sep 02, 2008 8:22 am Posts: 606
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Wow. Raggonix uses a laptop for a weapon. *schtunk* Anyways, yeah they're all short. VERY short. At least you put the effort of not putting 'unknown'.
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DH_Ninja
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Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 2:47 pm Posts: 1365 Location: New Jersey
Gender: Male
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You need to do a lot more with your bio and laptop is under weapons. If it isn't one, then remove it.
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