Name: Gary Lyward (I believe this is redundant.)

Gender: Male

Race: Human

Age: 16

Description:
A slightly tanned face 16 year old face with some black hair that never strayed too far from his forehead, and deep blue eyes. Not to mention the small pimple on the side of his otherwise perfect cheek. His 5 foot 6 inch self was lean and skinny. Found usually with absorbent armor, which absorbs most of the kinetic energy that hits it. There are several patches of the material forming plates to defend him. Flexible, and colored gray. A helmet is also usually on him, a green visor with a gray titanium area that covers the hair. Without his armor, he usually assumes a gray sweatshirt, and a gray pair of pants. On his back, he carried a strap, used to hold his Laser rifle, a rapid-fire long barreled weapon which uses laser sights and inflicts slugs which leaves burns. At his hip is a titanium plated strap, which carries a Laser pistol, another weapon with a constantly recharging power cell. Attached to his right forearm is a short-ranged beam knife, which flares out whenever he shoves his arm forward and flicks his wrist off to the right. Intensely powerful, hit has been known to cut through virtually anything. All weapons, excluding the Laser pistol and Rocket Launcher, rely on radioactive power chips, which supply the burn of the weapon. In his left thigh's pant pocket, he carries vacuum packs, which store many items in a single bag, and made to fit any pocket.
May also carry one of the following:
Highly concentrated laser beam rifle, used for sniping and burning holes OR
Furner(A type of fuel) propelled rocket launcher.
Additional items held:
Grappling beam hook, used to latch on to most materials and swing.

Personality:
A playful personality, yet very timid. Gary tends to "stick to the plan" and makes small cracks at joking. Feels strongly about every life he kills, and constantly fears death of himself.

Bio: (I'm going to try a third person bio)
Gary was 15 when he was along with his friends, Phil and Jason. He had a habit of hacking, and one day, skipping his homework, he and his friends were looking for a strategy game when he came a cross a site for military games. Coming across it, he broke in and activated a simulator. The simulator didn't have an appropriate connection to equipment used to run it, and so it basically logged in a pass record. Immediately his screen blanked out, and opened a "high score screen". Confused, he entered his data in. Apparently, his friends did as well. When he received an E-mail to meet a local park for military confirmation for joining, he and his friends went, only to be ambushed by a squad of soldiers, who carried them away, before the bombing of a revolting militia came upon their city. After a year in intensified military training which he barely survived, since the simulator gave off slightly high results, he quickly became an excellent soldier, along with his friends. He specializes in sniping, in any condition.

Shorter bio, less of a fail, (maybe the bio is) and snuff. POST ON IT!
Thx.

It has a good amount of potential to be a good bio, but there are still many flaws. I don't see how he's going to learn all of that in a year of intensified training. Especially during his teenage years. And his friends seem to be unnecessary in this bio. And where did he learn to hack at 15 years old?

The internet.

Intensified Training-to spped up training. Hacking, thats a necessary in a futuristic world. The friends were just there, its from a story I'm writing.
I see your point, but I got it under control.

I say it's great! Not anywhere near my level (as in the good meaning), anyways.
But I didn't quite get the BIO.

So, basically, he hacked into a military-video-game site, then triggered a simulator (as you say), and then received an E-mail of a military force. He then went into it, sorta got kidnapped, his city was bombed, then was trained in the military forces, and saw he had talents in sniping.
But was the military force saving him?
Why did they train him?

So, can you please answer?

LIES! YOU ARE BETTER!

Anyways, The simulator kinda triggered a pass record for Gary, and with all that sophisticated equipment they have now, they scanned a bombing, found several matches of people with exceptional skill there, and preformed a retrieval. And of course, sniping talent doesn't work unless you practice. I probably should have made the bio more concise. fixes*

But-but-but. I ain't, that's the problem :/

Ah, K. I get the bg better now. So, the army is kinda going to do an elite group of fighters? That's awesome, but somehow pretty morbid, if you ask me, because as we're speaking, they're doing this, but to young ones who have no-
What am I blabbering on about? This is about your bio.
Anyways, great, that's all I have to say : P