Ninjaman

Real Name: Unknown
Age: 14?
Height: 5'7"
Weight: 110 lbs
Job: Crime Fighter
Abilities: White Slash, White Tornado, White Hurricane, White Lightning
Zodiac: Cancer

Bio:
Ninjaman's life was a harsh one indeed. Witnessing the "death" of his father left him to protect the citizens of the city Gane. He soon found out that his father Samurai-man survived but the demon Armegeddon gave him the Black Blade that corrupted him. The Chaotin (guild for the spiritually gifted) Master saw the coming battle between Ninjaman and Samurai-man and gave Ninjaman the White Blade. Now Ninjaman's ultimate goal is to protect the city and defeat his father.



Samurai-man

Real Name: unknown
Age: 43
Height: 6' 8"
Weight: 237 lbs
Job: Corrupted man
Abilities: Black Slash, Black Swarm, Black Dash, Black Lightning
Zodiac: Leo


Chaotin Master

Real Name:???
Age:???
Height: 7'2"
Weight:???
Job: Guild Master
Ablilities: Dark Bullet, Fireball, Slash
Zodiac:???



Shadow

Real Name: Shadow
Age: 2 and 1/5 millenia
Height: 5'8"
Weight:???
Abilities: Dash (piercing fast move), Summon Dark Skeleton Warrior, Summon Skeleton Archer

Might be adding characters later! so, expect to see Armegeddon soon!

Whoo boy, where to begin...

Don't be mean.
You must tell him off politely.

I'm going to gut you! You need more detail in all relevant fields like profession, abilities and background.

Seriously guys.. please just try to be constructive.. save the venom for people who don't listen to legit attempts to help them get better..

You must be new at this (hopefully).

Name: It's not exactly nice to see a ??? on there. Just give the name unless there's some special reason (for example, a character reincarnates enough times to forget his/her true name).

Age: Ninjaman seems a bit too...young for that sort of action, and the Chaotin Master must look like a certain age, unless s/he always cloaked, or something.

Height/Weight: Nothing really wrong here, I think.

Job: What kinda job is crime fighter? I'm usually tired*, but really?

Abilities: The real kicker, so explain these abilities, their strengths, description, weaknesses, etc. Also did Ninjaman learn those abilities, or was it just a sort of "memory" the blade has?

Zodiac: Nothing really wrong.

Bio: That doesn't sound very harsh, minus the death part, he could've had a nice life with his mother (so explain more). Was it his father's duty to protect the various citizens? Is the Black Blade connected to the White Blade**? Tell us more about the Chaotin guild, is it respected? feared?

Meh, I guess 1.5/5, the extra from the bio.

*Which is usually everyday.

**And is the White Blade connected to the White Hilt? Eh, bad jokes...

I can explain things.

Chaotin Guild:

A secret but respected guild of legendary proportions to the citizens. Rumors in the city say that they are always wearing a hooded purple cloak.

Black Blade / White Blade:

Legendary Blades of great power. Thought by the Chaotin to be created by a mystical race of beings known as the Chaot. They are also thought to have a humanoid form.

He is not alone defending this city. He gets allies. As I said, I'll add more characters later.

Also Ninjaman's mother died giving birth.

Originally Samurai-man was the protector of the city.

Is the Guild everywhere? Does it have "connections" so to say?

Black Blade/White Blade: Why were they created? If not give the reason, then a hint or so.

The guild is easily explained as "the magical wanderer's guild"

White Blade = Lawful Black Blade = Chaotic

The blades were made to fight each other representing the battle for good and evil
other words, the blades were made to help make the races of the universe

Sorry. Didn't mean to come off sounding annoyed, but I guess I fail.

To tell you the truth, It's not all that bad. Everyone here has already said what I would of said, anyways.

Oh dont worry, its not like you were flaming him ^.^ was just saying is all. You're fine zesper.

I do believe Deus beats you to the title of "Ninjaman".

http://forums.mcleodgaming.com/viewtopic.php?f=23&t=1039

When I saw this I went...

I need to work on those....
screw those.

I'll explain things during my Rp.

sorry for the delay of info.