Name: dai shi

Species: rinshi

Nickname: n/a

Weapons:n/a

Powers/Abilities: life talons

Weaknesses: teamwork

Appearence: unknown

Backstory:is a leader and loving it.



Name: scorpiana

Species: rinshi

Nickname: none

Weapons: whip, life talons

Powers/Abilities: poison touch

Weaknesses: backfire

Appearence: unknown

Backstory: bad to the bone


Name: scaldrena

Species: rinshi

Nickname: doomsday

Weapons: dual swords

Powers/Abilities: life talon, electric shock, parilizes

Weaknesses:food

Appearence: n/a

Backstory: uses stealth as a way of getting fear


Name: rantipede

Species: rinshi

Nickname: n/a

Weapons: teeth, claws, nunchuck

Powers/Abilities: life talons

Weaknesses: fire

Appearence: centipede head, the other bits unknown

Backstory: loves porridge


beeville

weapons: tounge and six swords and a bow and arrow

weaknesses: no weapons coz without weapons he is useless

appearance: bee-like, HUGE wings

backstory, the only one without life talons

Well, I gave it a look, and this is what I saw.

Unknown

Unknown

Unknown

WAIT A MINUTE

Not much known

...

What?

None of your characters have any backstory.
In fact, none of your characters have any content.
At all.
No details.
Not even basic information is provided.

I laughed so hard at the bios.
They weren't even bios, just descriptions!

I wouldn't call them that.

What would you call it? Trash?

Yep.

Oh God no. You dissapoint me. What a surprise...

Nope. That's giving them too much credit. I would say more like it makes you feel

Dai Shi

Species: What the fuck is this? explain. 1/10

Nickname: UNKNOWN

Weapons/Powers/Abilities: Life talons should be a weapon.

Weaknesses: HOW THE FUCK IS THAT A FUCKING WEAKNESS?

Appearence: UNKNOWN AGAIN.

Backstory: Thats not a story.

1/10

Scorpiana

Species: See above rating+descript

Nickname: If there is none, leave out the category

Weapons: Better. 2/10

Powers/Abilities: Explain. 1/10

Weaknesses: WHAT? HOW THE FUCK? WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THAT? JUST "BACKFIRE"??? 0/0

Appearence: UN-FUGGIN-KNOWN?

Backstory: Dun-dunnah-dun-dun. Bad to the bone. 0/10000000000

0/10

Scaldrena

Species: Above.

Nickname: Why?

Weapons: Ok. 2/10

Powers/Abilities: More descriptive. 2/10

Weaknesses: So he DOESN"T FUGGIN EAT? 0/1000

Appearence: UNKNOWN? HOW DO YOU USE A CHARACTER IF YOU CANT SAY WHAT HE LOOKS LIKE? 0/10

Backstory: Cool story bro. 0/10

1/10

Rantipede

Species: FYSTLKAFSLGALFWLQGFWAsee above GAKGSCKAHDSKL

Nickname: k

Weapons: Only one nunchuck?

Powers/Abilities: K

Weaknesses: K

Appearence: OTHER BITS UNKNOWN? WAT

Backstory: Cool story bro.


Beevile
0/10

Total 1/1000000000

Please capitalize names. It makes them seem more official

Dai Shi:
What do the life talons do for him?
We can't know your character without know an appearance. It's one of the most important things.
A leader of what?

Scorpiana:
Backfire? Elaborate please.
Once again, needs an appearance.
Not a good backstory, just a personality trait.

Scaldrena:
How is food a weakness for her?
Needs appearance.
Once again, a trait, not a backstory.

Rantipede:
Needs more appearance. What color is the head?
...the backstory...do I even need to say it...

Beeville:
The grammar and elaboration of the weaknesses needs improvement.
Needs a better description of appearance.
The backstory is not anything that even needs to be said.

Obviously, you need to know what a backstory is:
- Something about where your character came from.
- Major impacts in your characters life.
- Any associations your character has made.
- What your character does for a living.

It sucks,
just like your freakin sprites n00b.

you've really been pissing me off lately, DiS how does that help him at all? your just gonna make him leave MG, then will you be proud of yourself?

Sorry dude.
My bad.

I'd be proud of him.

who knows, maybe when he learns to sprite, he will end up improving tremendously and could be a major contributer to the forums...