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I'm new at this so here i go Name:Koshindo Konome (also known as KK) Age: 17 Apperence: Short White hair. Brown eyes. Light skin. Wears: A black sleevless shirt, Black ninja pants with yellow stripes on them, Ninja greeves Height and weight: 5feet and 11 inches weigh 163 pounds Weapon of choice: Dagger, Twin swords, and shovel Skills, Fast in General and Very Sneaky Battle Style: He uses quick movements to confuse his opponents and then attackes. Personalitiy: Headstrong, Ignorance, impatient, usually like to do things alone. Other: has a sweet tooth especially for cake, loves to hit his pillow when angry,and Like to climb things of great height. Back Story: Koshindo was trained by a ninja master all his life, but Koshindo was impatient with his master for his boring ways of teaching. So one day he decided to leave the dojo and teach himself faster and better. he's travel over distant lands facing anyone he meets to improve his skills. Koshindo has used lots of weapon but the most important weapon he truly treasures is the shovel of his land given by his parents when he left to train. Although Koshindo enjoys the life he has right now he sometimes wonder what would of happened if he had stayed with his sensei. so how did i do?
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Green Mage
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| | | | Believeblood wrote: I'm new at this so here i go Name:Koshindo Konome (also known as KK) Age: 17 Nothing wrongAppearance: White hair How long?. Brown eyes. Light skin. Wears: A black sleeveless shirt, Black ninja pants with yellow stripes on them, Ninja greaves Height and weight: 5feet and 11 inches weigh 110 pounds Do people at his height and age weight that little?Weapon of choice: Dagger, Twin swords, and shovel Skills, Fast in General and Very Sneaky Err, about fighting ability?Personality: Headstrong, Ignorance, and impatient Maybe in sentences, and dealing with how he reacts to othersOther: has a sweet tooth especially for cake, loves to hit his pillow when angry,and Like to climb things of great height. Back Story: Koshindo was trained by a ninja master all his life, but Koshindo was impatient with his master for his boring ways of teaching. So one day he decided to leave the dojo and teach himself faster and better. he's travel over distant lands facing anyone he meets to improve his skills. Koshindo has used lots of weapon but the most important weapon he truly treasures is the shovel of his land given by his parents when he left to train. Although Koshindo enjoys the life he has right now he sometimes wonder what would of happened if he had stayed with his sensei. so how did i do? | | | | |
Pretty meh, don't feel like looking at the bio.
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A Cat
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| | | | Believeblood wrote: I'm new at this so here i go
Name:Koshindo Konome (also known as KK) Wut? I swear, Kyzak will go on Jap name rage soon. Age: 17 Apperence: White hair. Brown eyes. Light skin. Wears: A black sleevless shirt, Black ninja pants with yellow stripes on them, Ninja greeves Ninja is a bit overused, but I guess I can let it slide. Height and weight: 5feet and 11 inches weigh 110 pounds Whoa, 110? Is he anorexic? A good weight for someone that age is about 160-170 Weapon of choice: Dagger, Twin swords, and shovel I think shovel should count more as an item Skills, Fast in General and Very Sneaky Like Green mage, I'm pretty sure this is battle skills, though I don't use "skills" in my characters, so I wouldn't know. Personalitiy: Headstrong, Ignorance, and impatient More info maybe? It needs way more depth, like a paragraph at least. With the info you gave, it's similar to not really giving any info at all. Other: has a sweet tooth especially for cake, loves to hit his pillow when angry,and Like to climb things of great height. Back Story: Koshindo was trained by a ninja master all his life, but Koshindo was impatient with his master for his boring ways of teaching. So one day he decided to leave the dojo and teach himself faster and better. he's travel over distant lands facing anyone he meets to improve his skills. Koshindo has used lots of weapon but the most important weapon he truly treasures is the shovel of his land given by his parents when he left to train. Although Koshindo enjoys the life he has right now he sometimes wonder what would of happened if he had stayed with his sensei. Once again, Ninja is a bit overused. Might want to try for a longer story, perhaps two paragraphs and detail on his life as an apprentice, what he did, etc.
so how did i do? :sweat: | | | | |
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Whimmy, that wasn't Sayo
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f***, I wasn't reading the names.
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Blood
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i edit it alittle
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