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Skythe
Joined: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:11 pm Posts: 165 Location: California
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CORRECT! LEVEL UP! Level 6.
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Zhane
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:21 pm Posts: 891 Location: Angels Camp Country:
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A man walks in to a casino in a hotel. He is dressed in black, and has two suitcases. One suitcase contains 2 skulls, of a man and a woman. Skulls would not fit in a suit case dou to the way they are shaped The other contains weapons, explosives, and anything dangerous.Anyhthing dangerous is say a missile and that would obviously not fit The man walks into his room on the first floor. Hotels don't have rooms on the firstfloor if they are casino's that's where the casino is But then, he dies suddenly and drops the suitcases. He doesn't suddenly die like that, because if the suicase had explosives it wouldn't drop on the floor because that would be the cause of his death the suitcase would explode, now if he died from anything else it would not be instant unless it was a bullet through the head in which case his reflexes would still be gripping the suit case and he would hit the floor before the suitcase if not the fall would activate he explosives explode and therefore not fall. Because the other suitcase is nonexistant. Also it's briefcase not suitcase.... What has happened? 4 things wrong with the story!
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Sat Apr 03, 2010 2:37 pm |
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Skythe
Joined: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:11 pm Posts: 165 Location: California
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Nope. The suitcases (or briefcases) are really big. They can fit. 1/4! Nope. He had a heart attack.
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Sat Apr 03, 2010 8:19 pm |
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Zhane
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:21 pm Posts: 891 Location: Angels Camp Country:
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Heart attacks are not instant. Also a nuclear bomb owuld not fit a freaking silo wouldn't fit a freakin grizzly bear you said anything dangerous!
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So I'm kind of a magic nut and pretty good at it. So if you need any help with it let me know.
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Sat Apr 03, 2010 10:06 pm |
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Skythe
Joined: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:11 pm Posts: 165 Location: California
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Do you have to be all fussy about the story... and no, those aren't answers.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 12:25 am |
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Zhane
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:21 pm Posts: 891 Location: Angels Camp Country:
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Hellz yeah I do because obviously there are more things wrong. You said anything dangerous yet you also said he died instantly, yet you also said he had a heart attack either change the story or give me my points.
_________________ Stories working on: Aniki Amnesia, A moment's breath. (Title in progress) Any song or poem requests? I write them for free and have many of them. Give me a PM if you need help with anything. "Love is the light of hope when all else is dark."
So I'm kind of a magic nut and pretty good at it. So if you need any help with it let me know.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 1:42 am |
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Snoble
Joined: Tue Jun 16, 2009 2:48 am Posts: 834 Location: Australia.
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Just being nitpicky here... The way you've worded it makes it sound like he's walked straight into the casino from outside the hotel. He would have to walk into the hotel, then the casino. Another nitpicky point is that hotels only provide accommodation, usually. Therefore there wouldn't be a casino. Both seem very specific, though.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 2:07 am |
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maxmatsu
Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:19 pm Posts: 2682
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...HE wouldn't be able to get in with those suitcases.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:21 am |
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Skythe
Joined: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:11 pm Posts: 165 Location: California
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maxmatsu, if you are referring to how he can't get in because they check the luggage, then you just got the 2nd answer.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 10:54 am |
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maxmatsu
Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:19 pm Posts: 2682
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 11:50 am |
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JasonGuy299
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Unless the gods have created another Pandora's Box- which a doubt- there's no way you can fit everything dangerous into a suitcase. There are things that aren't objects that are dangerous.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 2:52 pm |
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Skythe
Joined: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:11 pm Posts: 165 Location: California
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Changed the story a little.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:08 pm |
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Zhane
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He would not drop the suitcases is is f*** human reaction too stay clinged to it and when he is dead it would be nigh impossible to take his hand off without breaking it. so the suitcase would not suddenly drop to the floor he would hit the floor first and it would not be suddenly anyways.
_________________ Stories working on: Aniki Amnesia, A moment's breath. (Title in progress) Any song or poem requests? I write them for free and have many of them. Give me a PM if you need help with anything. "Love is the light of hope when all else is dark."
So I'm kind of a magic nut and pretty good at it. So if you need any help with it let me know.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:17 pm |
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maxmatsu
Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 12:19 pm Posts: 2682
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Too much weight for a person to carry.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 4:52 pm |
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Zhane
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:21 pm Posts: 891 Location: Angels Camp Country:
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There are some light explosives there are also strong people point invalid. Anyways about my point valid.
_________________ Stories working on: Aniki Amnesia, A moment's breath. (Title in progress) Any song or poem requests? I write them for free and have many of them. Give me a PM if you need help with anything. "Love is the light of hope when all else is dark."
So I'm kind of a magic nut and pretty good at it. So if you need any help with it let me know.
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Sun Apr 04, 2010 5:06 pm |
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