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135
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Hi everyone! This is my first attempt at writing a SSF2 story. Constructive criticism and suggestions are welcomed. Well, without further ado, read and enjoy!
CHAPTER 1
Pedro looked sideways as he trod down the red brick road. It irked him a little, that he could not see where he was going, except for a sliver of the path in front of him stroked by his peripheral vision. Like a crab, he shuffled his feet sideways over the old, cracked cinderblocks. The same path he had trodden for months. Years. He did not go anywhere, for he only paced back and forth. Neither did he want to go anywhere else. In his perpetual march he stared off into the distance, where the horizon devoured the sun and wrought the moon each night. He watched as the stars pierced through the darkening sky. Sunrise, sunset, and then sunrise again he witnessed. Suddenly, a ball of fire hit him on the flank. Pedro was locked in Hit-Lag for a brief second, and then fell off into the abyss, the way Goombas do when hit with Mario's fireball.
Pedro waited. He opened his eyes again; looking around, his saw nothing. Darkness surrounded him.
Then, there was a flash. Not of light, but of shadows.
To be continued...
Last edited by 135 on Sun Jul 28, 2013 6:31 am, edited 3 times in total.
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Pochiman
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it's pretty cool so far
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Xyless
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It won't beat Smash Flash Chronicles, but good luck!
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135
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LOL Why have I not read that before? It's wonderful : )
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135
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CHAPTER 2
Mario brushed the beads of sweat off the furrows of his brows as he ran. Time was ticking. He did not have time to aim carefully and land on Goombas; he resorted to throwing fireballs at them instead. Mario was in a hurry. For today was the day that Peach invited him over to have cake at her castle. No mutant mushroom was going to get between him and his frosty confection.
At last, his eager eyes beheld the royal bastion. To pacify his breath, he lowered the pitch of his steps to a brisk stroll as he swung open the double doors. Right in front of him, right there in the center of the hall, was Princess Peach.
"Oh, Mario, I have not seen you in so long," Peach greeted as she kissed Mario, their tongues dancing together in a mutual Chain-Grab.
"Oh yeah, the cake is this way," said Peach. "Follow me."
Mario and peach entered the kitchen. There, on the table, was the biggest cake Mario has ever witnessed. It was four-tiered, with each smaller than the one below it. Its fluffy, moist interior was veiled underneath a layer of heavy cream, white and delicate like snow. A dash of tiramisu powder was sprinkled across the top sides of the cake. Each tier was encircled with a ring of red fruitage, each sparkling with a thin coat of syrup. Its sight and sweet smell alone titillated Mario's nostrils and made aching the emptiness within his stomach.
Mario smiled. "Well, what a pleasant delicacy. Don't mind if I help myself."
Peach smiled, looking over Mario's shoulder at the cake.
Then, with a quick flick of her wrist, she produced a dagger and stabbed Mario in the back with it. The cold steel of the blade tore through Mario's back and sheathed itself within the plumber's heart.
"AAAAAAAAAAUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Mario cried as he spewed blood. "PEACH, WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO DO, KILL ME?"
Peach's voice sounded over him as he collapsed to the ground in a heap, his strength gone:
"Peach? The Peach you know is dead."
To be continued...
Last edited by 135 on Sun Jul 28, 2013 8:50 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Densetsu
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Titan
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This is really good.
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Geno
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Lightning
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needs more sexual tension imo
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TacThree
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This is good... I needs mores :3
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Auraka
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Really like it so far :], btw, i want that cake.
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Pochiman
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Oh,that cake gave me hunger. And wow what is this super mario mafia with tongue kisses and blood and blades. It's a great story!
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Densetsu
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Wait, shouldn't that dagger do 10% damage and maybe knock Mario to the other side of the room? Is this an important plot point?
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TacThree
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Shouldn't it be a beam sword? lol
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