Name: WolvenXII
Real Name: Kayle york
Apperance: Dark, worn out pants and hooded shirt, old black trainers. His hair style changes during the time of day, at night it is limp and covers most of the features on his face, the day it props itself up. His eyes change colour reflecting his mood, they are generally a light blue, but become a blood red when his is threatened or angered.
Attitudes: During the day he is very light, a happy person, if not annoying. During the night, a solemn and dark loner, if not still annoying. No one is truely sure why, perhaps it just occurs.
Weapons: Black broadsword with a diamond shape cut out the middle.
Items: Water of life: a rare item found in only one place in the world, healling injuries and reversing the ireversable death. His use of the item is limited allowing himself to decay rather than renewing himself every morning.
Abilities: His abilites include the few he has 'swallowed' from enemies, and the two he claims as his own.
1) Shadowmelt: He can become a shadow at will, even encasing opponents in it if he feels the need.
2) Magic: In his former life, he had mastered all forms of magic (Of my world) and can still use them to this day.
Bio: His former life has been very harsh, losing his family in a fire, losing his best friend, living in loneliness for two-hundred years (Usually a Death-Wolf is destroyed before 100 years, how has he lived so long?). His only saviour now is a young girl who is incapable of even protecting herself, will she save him from himself, or is it too late for this 'immortal' child. He has also trained himself to be a speedy critter.

Name: Alice White
Apperance: Blond hair, deep blue eyes. 'Hard headed and a temper to boot'. She is often dressed in White shirt, a orange/brown skirt, and black tights.
Attitude: She often finds herself arguing with other people, usually about herself and her lack of ability or strenght. However she can also be very supportive as well.
Weapons: A transforming blade, capale of extending itself in two ways, launching itself forward or sideways. A final trick is it's ability to detatch from it's hilt and fly forward cutting anything in it's way.
Abilities: Her abilities are lacking in many ways, some even annoying to use.
1)Sword skills: Lacking in experience, swordskills are a neccesary part of a swordsman/woman.
2)Netherworld sight: An ability to see what is not 'really' there, such as spirits and gods.
Bio: Alice grew up as any normal child, in a family who loves her and sticks by her through thick and thin. They are no longer alive so now she has abandoned that life and travels with her only companion, since leaving her out look on life is different.

Name: Virus
Real Name: Drew Worthstone
Apperance: He appears to be another normal person, except the green bubbling substance on his arm which allows him extraordinary abilities.
Attitude: A kind, caring, understanding human being, however having been shunned by his people he has become detatched from alot of personal feelings. The loss of his love was muffled by his detatched personality, but inside he is secretly hurting.
Weapons: Nothing other than his arm.
Abilities: His abilities recide solely in his arm which leaves him vulnerable to multiple attacks.
1) Concussion: His ability to apply force to any given object beneath his grip.
2) Superstrength: This ability is because of the lack of straign his arm feels
3) Eating Virus: This ability occurs automaticly without his realisation, he is incapable of feeling sick as this virus eats all other viruses and poisons.
Bio: He was different from birth, having been born into a 'perfect world' he was one of the few screw ups, his love too was a mistake biologically and she too had powers. In a desperate attempt to rescue him from a deadly fate, she pleaded with Wolf to take him away, and he did.

All of these characters exist peacfully within the one body, although Wolf is the domanant shape. Each person exists individually as the whole, and each person is not physically related to the other. Why are they gathered together? Some underlying story which has drawn them together, who knows? I don't...

Confusing, un-detailed, lacking information, no explanations and very painful to look at.

Wow... no.

I think it makes alot of sense, then again that is me... I'll see what I can do to rectify your complaints...
It might be helpful if you could tell me exactly what the problem is

Well for example why is Wolven's behaviour so dependant on whether it's day or night?
How does he swallow abilities?
Why has he lived for 200 years? Is it specific to his race? Is he some sort of spirit?
Why has Alice left her family if she was so close to them?
Why is it that she can see spirits?
How did the Virus dude lose his love?
What is this virus on his arm and how did he contract it?
Perhaps some explanation on how they all co-exist in one body.

Just add some more detail in the back story so that we aren't left wondering about your character. When creating a Bio the readers should be able to clearly see the character. Virus' profile seems a bit rushed to me like you didn't add as much detalil to him as you did the other two. Though I like how you added an attitude section so we could kind of understand how the person acts. Basically you have the shell all you need is to do fill it up.

Right I didn't think of that...

First, His mood changes by how much light surrounds him. I may explain why when I truely know why.
By covering a person/object he is capable of forcing it to melt and swallowing it's particles, he can then burn the particles or reconstruct them to keep the abilities.
Wolf comes from a race that lives indefinatly, however it is rare for one to live more than one-hundred years, they are destroyed by the humans before they live too long. Wolf is just too careful.
Alice's family is dead, being a part of Wolf's body causes them to live as long as he does.
Alice's ability to see spirits is something she was born with, a random ability that appears within the world.
Drew's virus is from an attempt to create a perfect world by manipulating DNA, they screwed up his structure.
His love was also screwed up and gained similar powers to him, during a freak accident, the 'perfect world' was destroyed and Wolf rescued him, but Wolf couldn't get to her. That is how she was lost.

Cleaned up yet?

His emotions are a hundredfold more sensitive to the time of the day than regular humans are? (Most people's emotions ARE slightly affected by the time of the day)

I was reading some other people's RP characters, and I think I may need to explain things a little furthur. (I was worried about the word count.)

WolvenXII
Real Name: Kayle York
Age: 18
Apperance: Black worn out shirt w/ hood, it extends down into a cape like design from his hips to his feet. Black worn pants torn by the feet, black shoes with faded designes, a red 'W' on the outside. Brown hair covers his face during the night, by day it flips back to reveal his eyes, light blue during calm, red when threatened or angered. His body is covered with oily, dirty fur.
attitude: During the day he is friendly and light, the night his personality flips. This occurs because he believes a new adventure waits him during the day, the night he has to wait.
Weapons: Black broad sword decorated with black winged hilt and a diamond shape cut into the middle, he has also collected a variety of weapons during travels, however he has lost most of which in an 'accident'.
Abilities: Magic; Fire, Water, Thunder, Earth, Wind, Ice, Dark, Light, Nature, Time, Gravity, Death. He requires energy to use magic, a large amount is needed to use powerful kinds. Light magic damages him, and His Time magic is restricted to 'Stop', 'Slow' and 'Haste' as reversing time is impossable
Shadow melt; an automatic defence as well as a powerful assault tactic, he can use this ability to morph and even create shadow clones of himself and other people. With the use of this ability he is capable of 'swallowing' enemies and stealing their abilities.
Mission: He only wishes to protect the one he loves, before their meeting he had no meaning and only wished to kill himself.
Bio: Born of a normal family, he had a good life, going to school, making friends. On his seventeenth birthday a demon stole his girlfriend, in a desperate attempt to save her, he died. Which resulted in the hidden beast within him 'Wolf' to awaken and destroy the demon. This was the first time Wolf was released.

Alice White
Age: 18
Apperance: Blond hair parted in the middle, and blue eyes. She wears a white shirt and a orange/brown skirt patterned with rings hanging from it. Aswell as black skin-tight shorts beneath. At times she is seen wearing a black goth-like dress, during which her eyes are red.
Attitude: She is kind and caring, however she can also be hard-headed, with quite a temper.
Weapons: A transforming blade designed to become an axe or lance at the push of a button, it may also lunge out and cut objects directly in half with the push of both buttons.
Abilities: Magic; Fire and Water. With little limit.
Transformation; she transforms into the queen of gods, however the queen does as she likes and only listens when others offer her things she likes. She is known as Eve.
Mission: To help Wolf with his mission.
Bio: once a normal swordswoman, now an almost godess, Alice has trouble dealing with her lack of power in her human form, but must also keep her god-like power under wraps. As well as dealing with the loss of her family, she has only one thing to remind her of home, her sword used by her father years before she was born.

I'm removing virus for now, I might put him back up later.

I'm in a rush, so this will do for now. I haven't read the beginning post too.

Mary Sue.

Okay. He is called WolvenXII as he is the twelfth born Death wolf. His fur is lighter beneath his clothes.
There are a few specialty moves he has with specific weapons.
Light and healing magic, as he is dead, is his weakness. He also dislikes water.
His first girlfriend is dead... Now alice has taken her place...
When he was alive the wolf 'thing' would sleep, when he died it was released. He was chosen before birth to have it, by the god of death.

He does have a lot of magic, but this is only because he's had centuries to master them.

Erm.... try to be a bit more detailed... (like I can help with RPs... )
ANYWAYS!

Yeah, your bio, and, well, EVERYTHING, is a bit shady. "Color in" some more information, make it a bit more detailed. Try to get atleast one paragraph of information for each important article.

Look at the bright side, he's never going to use it in any half-way decent RP.

Just an FYI guys, please do remain constructive. I realize most of you are doing so, just saying..