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Living Shadow
Joined: Mon Aug 11, 2008 10:43 am
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Okay, heres some:
- Needs more of an appearance than lion.
- With his fire power, what can he do with fire. Create it and shoot it? Manipulate it but not create it? Create it and manipulate it at his will?
- His favorite weapon is an axe but: Does he carry the axe with him? Does he have any other weapons?
I havent read the backstory yet, but I'll edit this post if I have any further criticism or questions.
EDIT:
Par. 1-
Sent. 1: Where is he?
Sent. 2: figures
Sent. 3: What was he doing?
2nd to last sent.: Into is one word.
Par. 2-
He was in Flare's face...
Also, Flare isn't exactly an original name...
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Nate
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Well, it's a heck of a lot more original than Blaze.
I've never heard of any character named Flare before.
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N30Chaos
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It's a Sonic character. It's far from original.
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Nate
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I was reffering to the name.
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