first charecter...kinda new to this, so tell me if i did anything stupid or not acceptable

Name:Jaques
Age:8
RP:none
Race:Human (Assumed)
Appearence:Jaques hair is always a huge mess of brown curls. He has Blue eye matching his blue tunic. His blue tunic his ripped and old but Jaques refuses to take it off. He where brown boots and white socks and a big black belt. Jaques tends to where aviators when hes in a bad mood.
Bio:Jaques doesn't remember it but when he was 1 years old he did not want to go to bed. his parents kept on forcing him to. anger took over jaques and with his eye glowing red he killed his parents. Jaques doesnt remember this. he was found by the police and was brought to a orphanage. he befriends almost all of who he meat but anyone who knows him well knows that when hes angry he shuts himself in his room. jaques eye glow red when ever hes angry and when he makes eye contact with someone he slowly drains the happynise out of there mind, making them see things that are real, making them live nightmares, eventually they will go mad and kill themselves if the stare is long enough. this is how his parents died. considering he remembers nothing of his past he keeps his tunic inspite of how dirty it his.
personality:Jauges is very kind hearted and loves making people laugh, he is very inteligent for his age and is put in the orphanage's 9 yr old class. he is friends with all of the 8 and 9 yr olds. he is the only one that knows of his powers. he recognizes what he can do but he has yet to learn to control it or why it even happens. he thinks of his power as a curse but he will soon find out its a gift
weopon:baseball bat, Jaques stole one from the playground equipment bin, hiding it under his bed in case of an emerjancy
power:doomstare

recent
Jaques, after travel for four years, found a nice little home in The Sandbox where he plans to train.

If you want to be taken seriously, you'll need to clean up the spelling/grammar errors.

Bio is very repetitive, so try to make it less repetitive. And use spell check.

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so uh, how is he kind and f*** insane at the same time?

This is exactly what I was thinking

ah kay, im saying when he like nice and stuff but when he gets angry and potentionally deadly he isolates himself from people in a sence trying to protect them...

ya to be honest i wasnt expecting 5 stars....ill fix all my grammer....as soon as i feal not lazy...

Is his name pronounced: JACKS? or JA-KES?

Phonetic Pronunciation: zhahk

tenically its suppose to have a c imbetewwn the a and the q but i didnt like the c

All right. My only critique is clean up the grammar. When you RP you want to have words everyone can understand, not tech talk.

ehhhh stop making fun of me!

No, i'm not. lol. It's just something for you to work on.

i still havent grasp the whole consept of RP but by the time i do my grammer should be top notchy

Not only do you have bad grammar, you have bad punctuation and spelling.

really?

okay i think we got the whole "i suck at english" thing down...ill revise it soon just give me a minute...get over my lazy-itis