The lack of update makes Luna sad.
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It seems that, in the midst of such a supposedly excellent attempt at this "webcomicing", nobody has bothered to look for the flaws contained so blatantly within. Thus, I have decided to make an in-depth review of your comics so far. I would suggest you avoid reading further than this paragraph if you are not mentally prepared for harsh criticism, as you will not be able to extract any sort of benefit from this post otherwise.

For general convenience, I will review each episode separately, then provide a summary of their flaws at the end. An analysis can only be as long as what it is based on; I must request you appreciate the length of what I am able to write, as my limits are defined by your work.

I'd like to start off with the first thing that caught my eye: the writing. It's absolutely atrocious. None of it even remotely fits the characters in question (THEN LET'S DANCE); even if it did, it doesn't flow from panel to panel at all. It's as if you didn't think a word of it out at all, a problem that persists throughout all three episodes. It's something I'd expect to come out of an adolescent child, really. Moving on to the setting, the first few panels evoke a few questions right away. Why are Metaknight and Ganondorf in a city? How does Metaknight know Ganondorf is hiding somewhere nearby? Most importantly, why are they fighting? There are no answers to be found, as there is no.. foreplay to the fighting; it's just mindless combat. I'd also like to point out your terrible selection of sprites. I'm no expert, but I don't think Metaknight is always posed for a fight. How would he get around? I shouldn't have to point out your mistake of zooming in on sprites, but you did it anyway so apparently I do. Furthermore, is it just me, or is Ganondorf's sword copy-pasted into his hand? It's either that or a shoddy sprite sheet.

Episode two is the worst of the trilogy, in my educated opinion. All flaws presented in episode one carry over with an uncanny finesse; bad writing, pointless combat, and a multitude of terrible sprite choices. I'll just skip to the point here: What the f#%$& is up with Bomberman? Why is he making noises like he's vibrating or something?? Why is he in this city helping Metaknight anyway?? Jesus, he's angry. Saying any more than I have would just be restating points from the former episode, so let us move on.

In episode three, flaws persist, the writing is unfit for the characters in use, etc. I believe the point of fan fiction is to make up a story while preserving the chosen character's personality; you've failed in this regard. Sonic has no apparent motive for obtaining the Master Emerald, though I most would believe Eggman gets off on harassing Sonic. Wario is like a statue depicting a flexing behemoth for all of three panels, at which the episode abruptly ends with a collective "Nooo..." from reader and character alike. The shoddiest episode, perhaps, but not the worst.

In summary, it needs a lot of work. All of it is crude, as if you gave no thought to the lines, much less the poses. None of the writing matches the personalities of the characters, though the writing would be terrible regardless of fit. I'll give you the same advice I give everybody else: put actual effort into what you do; soon it will flourish with beauty and grace. I have no idea why anybody likes this comic in the state it's in, really.

And of course Meta Knight isn't always posed for a fight, it's a comic.

Also, would you quit calling me a child? It's annoying, and I would prove you wrong but I don't want to reveal my age.

With my and many other fan fiction and webcomics, you're not really sure what's going on until it's explained shortly after. It builds up suspense and adds a mysterious theme to the story.

(Though I do put a lot of effort into everything I do. You should see my fan fiction. You wouldn't believe it.)

As much as i want to tell Kyzak to shut up and stop b**** on his comics, i think hes got some point at the battle scenes. This comic feels a little random because theres not much storyline and we don't know why they are fighting and such...

Shut up and stop b****. Kyzak's being fair and offering advice. If you can't even see that and call every kind of critique 'b****', please shut the hell up and never get anywhere near any form of communication again.

i will send you a pm about this soon because you clearly do not understand how the system works

I am by no means an expert at comics and writing, but I think you are supposed to lay down the motive for battle before people start fighting, not after.

I just said Kyzak is correct at one point of his critique
What? I can't agree?

As much as i want to tell Kyzak to shut up and stop b$%&# on his comics, i think hes got some point at the battle scenes. This comic feels a little random because theres not much storyline and we don't know why they are fighting and such...

Kyzak to shut up and stop b$%&# on his comics

shut up and stop b$%&# on his comics

As much as i want to tell Kyzak to shut up and stop b$%&# on his comics, i think hes got some point at the battle scenes.