Emma gasps.

“Oh, for crying out loud,” Eta says.

“We’ve got to do something!” Emma says.

“If we find a way to bring them back to life, I’m telling them to stay behind this time,” Eta says, “It looks like you and I are the only two who don’t die every other hour.”

OOC:Page 5. grade?

The time has come. Please note that a bad grade is not a personal attack, nor is a good grade a sign of favor. The judgement is done completely without personal bias.

Judgement Day

▲▼ Your stat system is very, very basic. While this is rather easy to use in its current state, it is also perhaps overly simplistic. You also do not explain in the first post how the system works. And the system itself is still a bit buggy.
▼ Your characters die every half-second, randomly. It’s ruining the mood big-time, and isn’t really adding to the drama at all. It’s gotten to the point the Eta is seriously considering not trying to bring Kando back, as he would only die once more in short time.
▼ Your Tame skill is more like a Control Animal than actual taming. Taming is when you gain an animal’s trust and friendship. What you do is more of a magical control. It’s a minor detail.
▼ You don’t really use EXP at all, even though you have a slot for it. You just tell us when we level up, arbitrarily. Not to mention, you don’t provide an EXP table.
▼ You gain skills at random, when it suits you. This ruins the challenge of the RP. Not to mention, you do tend to make overly-powerful attacks when you need to finish off an enemy fast. That’s not how it should go, and once again ruins the challenge. In a well-made boss battle, survival should be possible, but it should not be a given.
▲ The plot is fairly straightforward and stays focused on the goal.
▼ The antagonist (the bad guy) is too powerful. If he can kill you from a distance so easily, what chance would any of us have when we actually meet the guy, realistically?

Your Grade: D-

No offense, but this RP is quite a mess. It’ll take a lot of work to get it to good quality, and could theoretically be turned around as such, but it might be a better idea to scrap this and try again.

And a word of advice. Next time, try to make a more detailed ruleset, so there’s less confusion and less room for godmoding. Or try making a non-stat RP.

OOC:

[i]*OOC: I’m still working on the rubric (what level of quality is considered to be what letter grade), but still… Sorry, UP. I hate to be the one to tell you.*

"P..kkk.....healllllllllllllllllllllllllll!"
Nekan and kando are healed.

OOC:It too 45 pk heals.

"Emma, search for danger in the air. Eta, listen for danger. Nekan, Use you Pk powers to seek evil out. I will search on foot."Kando says walking into the woods.

He can breath without them. Nekan was born with no lungs.

OOC:

OOC:I have no new ideas.

do what i do, listen to good amv music and try to think of a really cool sequence, then build around it. That is how I came up with Elemental Armory, i don't remember what song, but it had to do with someone throwing three kunai, they created a large explosion on contact. Then they turned into a light, came back to the thrower in the form of a single two handed sword which pulled him down toward his target and sliced him creating another blast. then i made sense off it and look what happened.