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Nile for Phoenix Remedy 

Do you think my bio is good?
Yes 10%  10%  [ 1 ]
No 80%  80%  [ 8 ]
Indifferent 10%  10%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 10

Nile for Phoenix Remedy 
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Joined: Sat May 30, 2009 5:57 pm
Posts: 686
Country: United States (us)
Gender: Male
Name:Nile
EDIT: Name: Mystyr Nile
Age:15
Birthday: Feb 8
Talents: Mixed Martial Arts
Appearance: angular face; buff
Height: 9'2'', 110'', 3.056yrds(2.794m)
Wingspan: 12'10'', 154'', 4.278yrds(3.912m)
Weight: 924lbs (419.12kg 66stone)
Body Mass Index(BMI): 52.8(2*average human BMI)
Race: Giant
Veteran: no, too young
Backstory: Nile's village has been destroyed by a wildfire and he has been searching all over and around Varsk for any survivors of the fire, but to no avail. One day, Nile found a strange tunnel in a rip through the air. After a few seconds of staring at this tunnel, it sucked him into it, and he found himself in a mysterious Island(Phoenix). EDIT: The tunnel knocked him out on reentry.
Gender:Male
And it's already accepted by WarPanda!


Last edited by Mystyr Nile on Tue Jan 19, 2010 5:09 pm, edited 2 times in total.



Sat Jan 16, 2010 12:50 pm

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I am confused and enraged by this bio.


Sat Jan 16, 2010 3:12 pm
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Kyzak wrote:
I am confused and enraged by this bio.
And I'm confused by your thoughts on this bio. And too bad for you, It's accepted. Oh yeah, you don't play Phoenix Remedy.


Sat Jan 16, 2010 3:16 pm
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Kyzak, he's new at this, and this is his first bio. I DO consider the PR to be a bit of a home to the "newer recuits", not that I'm not one. Nile, trust me, Kyzak is more than likely way better at this than me, although he may be a little harsh.

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Sat Jan 16, 2010 3:21 pm
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WarPanda has a point.

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Sat Jan 16, 2010 3:24 pm
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Currently Playing: The Game
Interesting on how Nile knows MMA (not a lot of people actually bother to define their combat style, let alone write a full description of it). Still, its pretty bad, even for a character sheet bio.

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Sat Jan 16, 2010 4:32 pm
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[sarcasm]Gee, thanks.[/sarcasm]


Sat Jan 16, 2010 4:37 pm

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If you can't take the criticism, get out of this section.


Sun Jan 17, 2010 2:29 am
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It's my section. :roll:


Sun Jan 17, 2010 11:25 am
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Section = Character bios section.

And I can't really think right now, so I can't give proper constructive critisism.

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Sun Jan 17, 2010 2:06 pm
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Gawd this sucks ballz you be trippin

It lacks a lot of information. And IMO he needs more of a story.
I'm such a sheep. :D

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Sun Jan 17, 2010 2:23 pm
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Mystyr Nile wrote:
It's my section. :roll:

You're basically saying "This is my topic, so if you don't have any compliments, get the f*** out."


Sun Jan 17, 2010 2:29 pm
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:'( wrote:
Mystyr Nile wrote:
It's my section. :roll:

You're basically saying "This is my topic, so if you don't have any compliments, get the f*** out."

Which isn't the point of this section.

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Sun Jan 17, 2010 2:30 pm
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Mystyr Nile wrote:
Name:Nile
EDIT: Name: Mystyr Nile
Age:15 Child Prodigy.
Birthday: Feb 8
Talents: Mixed Martial Arts
Appearance: angular face; buff ; 5 fingers per hand
Height: 9'2'', 110'', 3.056yrds(2.794m) 9'2"? All realism has been dropped. Especially since he's only 15.
Wingspan: 12'10'', 154'', 4.278yrds(3.912m)...what
Weight: 924lbs (419.12kg 66stone) A 924 pound fifteen year old? Does he have an eating disorder?
Body Mass Index(BMI): 52.8(2*average human BMI) His BMI is actually 53.7.
Race: Giant
Veteran: no, too young
Backstory: Nile's village has been destroyed by a wildfire and he has been searching all over and around Varsk for any survivors of the fire, but to no avail. One day, Nile found a strange tunnel in a rip through the air. After a few seconds of staring at this tunnel, it sucked him into it, and he found himself in a mysterious Island(Phoenix). EDIT: The tunnel knocked him out on reentry. This does not tell us anything about the character's personality.
Gender:Male
And it's already accepted by WarPanda!


I'm no expert, but my opinions are in bold.


Sun Jan 17, 2010 7:32 pm
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Mystyr Nile wrote:
Kyzak wrote:
I am confused and enraged by this bio.
And I'm confused by your thoughts on this bio. And too bad for you, It's accepted. Oh yeah, you don't play Phoenix Remedy.

Hah.

Mystyr Nile wrote:
It's my section. :roll:

HAH!

Damn it, Panda, you're turning into Zesper. Don't make me kill you, too.

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