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Author:  Darksonic C4 [ Tue Mar 01, 2011 5:39 pm ]
Post subject:  Asial Keyes and Sinder Harrison

Name: Asial Keyes


Race: Neko


Age:17 years old(current)


Personality: Childish at times. She loves the color green. She's not use to fighting with swords. She only uses her sword "in time of need".


Background: Asial was born by her parents D'ante and Alexis Keyes on March 27,1993. When she was two, her parents died in a house fire trying to save her. Asial escaped into the woods, where she is save by her future friend Sinder. Sinder raised her to become her fighting buddy. Around the age of 12, Sinder give her a earth-bending armband. This give her the power to bend rocks and water. She also can punch back bullets and huge missiles. Asial never got into school(she's not dumb), so she doesn't know much about our world.


Ability/Skill: She's really not magical. She can put all of her energy into one blow. She also has increiblie speed and she's a lightweight type.

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Name: Sinder Harrison


Race: Neko


Age: time of creation unknown


Personality: She's strong hearted and never gives up on a fight. She loves freedom and will always help someone in need.


Background: Sinder really has a tough life. She doesn't even know where she came from. She found herself on the coast of Jacksonville,Flordia. Many people were scare of her for the way she looked like a cat/human. This is what cause the F.B.I and the U.S. National Guard get involed(they want to do some tests on her). When she was avoiding the National Guard in the forest, she met Asial. The two visit around the United States running away from the NG and trying to get out of U.S. borders.


Ability/Skill: She controls the element fire. She can throw burst of fire out of her hands. She also has increiblie speed and a form called burst limit. This is where the fire she shoots gets hotter and turns blue.

Author:  Whimzer [ Tue Mar 01, 2011 10:04 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Asial Keyes

Darksonic C4 wrote:
Name: Asial Keyes


Race: Neko ?


Age:17 years old(current)


Personality: Childish at times. She loves the color green. She's not use to fighting with swords. She only uses her sword "in time of need". more detail


Background: Asial was born by her parents D'ante and Alexis Keyes on March 27,1993. When she was two, her parents died in a house fire trying to save her. Asial escaped into the woods, where she is save by her future friend Sinder. Sinder raised her to become her fighting buddy. Around the age of 12, Sinder give her a earth-bending armband. This give her the power to bend rocks and water. originality please She also can punch back bullets and huge missiles. godmodding Asial never got into school(she's not dumb), so she doesn't know much about our world. Our world? What is this plot hole? You never mentioned her being on a different world or moving to a new one at all.


Ability/Skill: She's really not magical. She can put all of her energy into one blow. She also has increiblie speed godmoding and she's a lightweight type.

Nothing special

Author:  Whimzer [ Tue Mar 01, 2011 10:08 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Sinder Harrison

Darksonic C4 wrote:
Name: Sinder Harrison


Race: Neko ?


Age: time of creation unknown That's very generic


Personality: She's strong hearted and never gives up on a fight. She loves freedom and will always help someone in need. more detail


Background: Sinder really has a tough life. She doesn't even know where she came from. How is that really possible? explain more She found herself on the coast of Jacksonville,Flordia. Many people were scare of her for the way she looked like a cat/human. This is what cause the F.B.I and the U.S. National Guard get involed(they want to do some tests on her). ahahahaha what? This is reading like a bad fanfiction already When she was avoiding the National Guard in the forest, she met Asial. The two visit around the United States running away from the NG and trying to get out of U.S. borders.


Ability/Skill: She controls the element fire. She can throw burst of fire out of her hands. She also has increiblie speed godmodding and why does she have the same abilities? That's bland and a form called burst limit. This is where the fire she shoots gets hotter and turns blue. More info?

Just like the last, nothing special.
Both definitely need to be heavily reworked.

Author:  SS [ Tue Mar 01, 2011 11:45 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Asial Keyes and Sinder Harrison

Just so we're clear on this, they're both cats?

Author:  Whimzer [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 12:01 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Asial Keyes and Sinder Harrison

Why?

Author:  SS [ Wed Mar 02, 2011 4:09 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Asial Keyes and Sinder Harrison

Assuming his race (ie Neko) is a romanisation of the Japanese word for cat.

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