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Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.
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Author:  MegaSackboy [ Wed Nov 06, 2013 3:21 pm ]
Post subject:  Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

You can download it here:
http://dreamcastboy99.deviantart.com/ar ... -411961609

My Guess is that you all will be like WTF this is only 8 pages of a pedo-slaying 12-year old!
Issue #2 Will be 2 pages longer,and issue #3 will be full-length.

EDIT:I know NinjaDude is immature. He is only 12,and doesn't have any common sense.

Author:  clubby [ Wed Nov 20, 2013 8:24 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

Okay, how about some critique;
The expressions make his head grow or shrink, and his hand is mutated. The whole "Pedobear" gimmick fails when he isn't drawn right, and doesn't put up a fight. The main character isn't likeable, because he seems immature. Even the "sound" effects don't match! If you blast someone's arm with that, it wouldn't make a "crack" sound unless it's a cannon ball! The coloring and art seems lazy, as the colors are scribbled on, the lines and looks of the characters change each panel, and it's almost impossible to read because of there's a sort of echo behind some of the words. A random donkey kong chucks oil barrels; never explained. Why the explosion didn't kill him; never explained, and you used "LOL" as comic dialogue. If you ever make a ep. 2, improve and take more time. If it's your first, though, it's pretty decent.

Author:  MegaSackboy [ Sat Nov 23, 2013 7:35 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

Clubby Bear wrote:
Okay, how about some critique;
The expressions make his head grow or shrink, and his hand is mutated. The whole "Pedobear" gimmick fails when he isn't drawn right, and doesn't put up a fight. The main character isn't likeable, because he seems immature. Even the "sound" effects don't match! If you blast someone's arm with that, it wouldn't make a "crack" sound unless it's a cannon ball! The coloring and art seems lazy, as the colors are scribbled on, the lines and looks of the characters change each panel, and it's almost impossible to read because of there's a sort of echo behind some of the words. A random donkey kong chucks oil barrels; never explained. Why the explosion didn't kill him; never explained, and you used "LOL" as comic dialogue. If you ever make a ep. 2, improve and take more time. If it's your first, though, it's pretty decent.

Issue two is finished,but needs to be inked and colored:
*The characters are redesigned.
*Dr. Rabbit appears.
*NinjaDude is now a year older with a new hairstyle.
*Link, Zero and Shadow appear.
*I am a horrible artist.
Issue #3 is still WIP and it will be better than the first 2.

Author:  clubby [ Sat Nov 23, 2013 7:59 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

MegaSackboy wrote:
*Dr. Rabbit appears.

Hello there!

Author:  Deep THoT 42 [ Sat Nov 23, 2013 8:01 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

i don't think being a mangaka is your calling.

and work on your handwriting

Author:  Whimzer [ Sun Nov 24, 2013 4:08 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Elite^4 Issue #1 Finally Published.

the best thing is to be able to find paper that isn't college wide ruled

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